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I have two scenes back to back. In one the girl is happy and in the second one, the man is upset. I do not cuss or swear so I am unclear on the rules to use regarding capitalization when any of those words are used. Below I have posted the two scenes, do I capitalize the last word on scene two?

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     Samantha smiled. She wasn’t paying attention to Attache Henry Church’s speech. She thought of Callisto. The nation-state had started from a tiny base. The giant ice spires of that moon and the “first landing” monument had brought visitors and growth to that world and Kape had so much more. Kape gave people a dream, a definite “Rainbow Connection” for the taking. Life was good.

     James frowned. All of his crews kept reporting the same contamination in the mineral stores used in the hydroponic systems. The food already processed was okay. All plants grown after the “Space Bubble Transit” showed radioisotope poisoning. The plants still generated oxygen at acceptable levels. They were inedible without being vaporized and then being “printed” as emergency food bars which tasted like soggy cardboard. Life was a bitch.

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I think it's fine, although this piece reads a bit boring - very low-grade reading level, with almost all sentences being quite short and the same structure.

I would not capitalize "!@#$" in this context, because it's not aimed at a specific person. It's also a very common saying, as well as internal dialogue, so I think you can keep it.

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I am thinking the piece is divided, the first is the end of a chapter and the second is the start of the next chapter. If I understand correctly, what you are saying is I shouldn't need to worry about capitalizing those types of words unless the character is speaking out loud and addressing the comment to another character. Thank you for the feedback, it's much appreciated.

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hmmm ... I think it might depend on if it's being used as a Noun, or a Pronoun? Or if it's directed at a person, or an inanimate object? emoticon







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Here's an example:

Most kings stay on the throne until they day. Not so King George, who married his love and resigned in order to do so.

See the difference? In the second sentence, king is capitalized because it's the title of a specific person. That's the easy version, though.

I need to check Betrayal for that very problem, because Ferren chooses to refer to Dorelle as "that !@#$" throughout the story, refusing to use her name. Despite the rule, I'm not sure if I should capitalize it or not. I'm leaning towards not capitalizing it, because he is not using it as a name. emoticon

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