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Registered: 08-2005
Location: Edmonton, Alberta, Canada
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REEEE-jected


Tapestry was rejected. Here's their very encouraging PFO, though:
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Dear Liam Johnstone,

Thank for your submission to Every Day Fiction. I regret to inform you that we are unable to use it at this time.

Well-crafted prose and an interesting idea. I don"t think, though, that we are given quite enough information to really make the story work. I need a bit more information to convince me that the protagonist is the good guy and the others are the bad guys, to buy into this world where a man can step into a loom and disappear. I had to read it a couple of times to sort out what I think is going on, and even then I"m not certain. But there"s definitely a germ of a good idea here, and this author should develop it. --Camille

This does sound like the beginning of an interesting story, and the prose kept me captivated, but it doesn't feel complete in and of itself. There's not much character arc or plot development. The prose is good, and we'd like to see more from you, but we need a little more from a story than what is here.

We wish you good luck in placing the story elsewhere.

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Sincerely,

Jordan Lapp
Managing Editor
Every Day Fiction
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So, it tells me things I already know. It's not a very deep story. At 268 words, I'm not up to that yet. Maybe after a pile of practice - we'll see. The prose kept them captivated - that's encouraging. But it's not complete - I definitely agree with that. I don't know how to write a complete story in so few words. I kind of saw flash or short, short fiction as a vignette, rather than as a complete story. Shouldn't it be something that makes you want to read more? Or am I looking at it wrong? If that's the case, I accept their assessment.
I guess I have a ways to go in my story development and characterization - but that's not terribly surprising.

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Registered: 05-2003
Location: Germany
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Awww, I liked the story.

I can see their points - and I'm very glad they gave you such precise feedback. Of course, now you can expand the story, add some background and show how he escaped.

There are many markets for short fiction, this really doesn't have to be the end for this story.

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Registered: 08-2005
Location: Edmonton, Alberta, Canada
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Yeah, it's nice to be able to see where my work can use improvement.

I think the big thing with this is I have next to no experience writing ultra-short stuff, so I have a hard time jamming the stuff that seems to come naturally into so few words.

I'm not too worried about resubmitting anywhere else. I'll look at the story and if I can think of how to drastically improve it, I'll look at submitting it somewhere else then. If not, I'll stick it up on my blog and forget about it.

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Registered: 05-2003
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Heh.

That is a rather philosophical way of seeing it. I hope you'll find something to improve it.

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Registered: 03-2007
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Aww, that's to bad! At least they didn't just say no. Good luck with the rewrite if you decide to do one!

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